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Post by Deth on Sun Dec 12, 2010 4:33 am

This is quite a long poem. A single story, each part with a different smaller poem, broken down into a prologue, eight parts, and an epilogue.

Stark Ibis by Lucifer T. M. M.

Prologue : Fate

'Was once a frore night,
The powder lay around.
I fold my arms tight.
Withstand the diving plow.

I'm but a broke man.
I've not a noble rank.
I've but two hands
And a home to my name.

On slope was I, kneeling the ground
While I lay eyes on what I'd found.
'Was a stark ibis.
'Was a feeble thing.
A velvet stain,
soaked bolt in its wing.
I took her in.

Some fortnight, alleviated.
Appeared by my bedside in the moonlight
All tongue tied and stark-white.
We'ere courted.
Chimes ring soft for our union
And our linen was parted.
We fell in.

Use the bewailing bell
To see it covered red.
Newly freed elk
Gone but never fled.
All I ever was to do
Was to keep you.
How she loved me.
She could bring it back.


Part I : Tranquility In Simplicity

I have hung on the rim of your generosity
While cold night held us warm in kind arms.
The touch of your hands and your fingers,
The ceiling of sky so calm.
Although it's tardy I can not help but thank you,
You're the light of my tunnel so dark.
Please be here beside me forever
It kills me to know you're so far.

Choosing only the stars we favor
Between two hands turned to heart,
You whisper in my ear my welcomes
And a promise we'll never part.
I hold it so true, so do you
As we lie here together we slowly become one.
This is how we will rest until the moon turns to sun.

Later still, your eyelids start to fade and shiver
As if the wings of the last ibis to leave.
For yourself, the heat, or no reason
You cling further yet closer to me.
The breeze toys the leaves just above us
Our hearts the only sign of life
As we lie and we think to ourselves
I lean over to whisper if you'll be my wife...


Part II : The Venture


There's an isle, cryptic, in the sound.
Coming tides, please lie the boats aground.
Prepare your blade and bayonet
The curlers carved their ever best.
And sorrow filled the stillness all around.

There's a dock that's wayward within the reeds.
A harbor caught in outward appending trees.
Among the bones of comrades.
No marker here, no fingerprints
The currents here lap down to a sea.

The tides will ebb and flow.
Saw nothing but a waking and
The willows test the wind.
All we can know for sure
Amidst our dimming light:
They're not going home again.

In the valley burrowed in the heat
A wooden cradle rocks the baby to sleep.
The contents watched by affluence
Not Abaddon, nor Adramaleck.
A shocking shaking swells below the deep...


Part III : Tides Turned


As I was stirred
The dock by the water
A spiteful sable
'Was Satan's daughter.

Withdrew my pistol,
Pulled my collar.
You'll blow no whistle
Or you will be murdered.

I stared, I froze,
I cry give me mercy.
Take my gold and silver,
Just please release me.

He took no gold.
He took no silver.
Offer my soul, though,
Freedom was delivered.


Part IV : Of Love And Death


I did watch your eyelids with coins rested on your eyes.
Watched you drift in water to numb my grieving cries.
Time for sleep now, my stark ibis.
But only two weekends in the roost.
You won't know you're drowning.

I won't forget, not once
Dear, all've forgotten you.
Even once your friends, now,
They've forgotten too.
You won't know you're drowning.

Hear me please my ibis.
Heed my saintly cry.
Watching you drift from me,
Cold coins lie on your eyes.


Part V : Denial


There's no place to go
There's no way I'm leaving
No way I'll be going.
I won't tell you goodbye.
When I'm alone, I am nothing
Only dying.
Don't make me say goodbye.

I'll wait here beneath storm clouds in the rain
Thunder, snow, I don't care, I'll be here to wait
As our past is lost
As you say your final words
I start to die
I don't need God
I won't stand in line

You let me go.
You didn't say goodbye.
You're gone, you knew I'd die.
You didn't say why.


Part VI : There Is No Closure, I


Here I am, anniversary of once a fateful day.
On the grass, on my knees, I brushed your leaves away.
I've placed two red roses on your grave today.
Came to chat, came to cry, so many things I want to say.

It's really over, you're gone and there with her.
You know we had the world to see.
All that's left now is a small square plaque sitting here in front of me.
Now you're gone, there's nothing to show for,
We must live with decision we make,
But I just won't live without you today.

I remembered your birthday.
Seventeen you'd be, making your way.
Everything would be different if we could do it again.
But all I can give are two red roses here
And they're not helping me make amends.

I find myself thinking again of the life we could have had.
You and I walking hand in hand.
You and I never wanting life to end.
Forever you can be at my side.
I'll see you in another life.


Part VII : Unfulfilled Dreams


We will create something beautiful and destroy it.


Part VIII : There Is No Closure, II


Do you want to know if it hurt?
Everlasting pain that you've caused?
Both of our lives, now only one life.
Do you want to know why it is you deserved this?

Now as your family lets you die
And I'm beside you, well alive
All of my memories are penned in ink
No way to erase our friendship
Once seen, only sorrow will it bring.

The medic to your room
Tell of your cancerous lungs
Won't be breathing, the drugging that comes
Will please you, will save you.
Sedates you into a deep sleep
Won't be here to watch us weep.

Something beautiful.
Something stricken from me.
I'm not ready for you to die.
Today can only end
With your life complete.
My dear stark ibis here in front of me.


Epilogue : Life Does Not Go On


When all is calm and complete,
Will our hearts still feel hurt inside?
Will the pains go away at night?
The morning a smile, before it sets in,
It's the best part of my day.
When everything is still alright.
The sadness is still unknown.

Finally, the pain kicks and I think
Will it end, when does the end complete?
And Death himself emerges to say:
I can help with anything if you let me in.
I can make it all go away, something you wish to tell?
Urges appeased, I give in, and he sends me to Hell.


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Post by Skyzers on Sun Dec 12, 2010 7:21 am

So much word.... but i like it
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Post by Sarah on Sun Dec 12, 2010 11:04 am

Wow. Can't describe it. It's really deep and really nice to read.

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Post by Deth on Sun Dec 12, 2010 11:43 am

Hey thanks =)
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Post by Magic on Sun Dec 12, 2010 11:57 am

The first one calmed me
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Post by Sarah on Sun Dec 12, 2010 11:59 am

I WISH YOU KNEW MY TEACHERRR SHE'D ABOSLUTELY LOVE THISSSS AND PUBLISH IT IN OUR SCHOOL COMPETITION MAGAZINE D:

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Post by odsmk on Sun Dec 12, 2010 12:50 pm

Your poetry is literally a work of art.
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Post by Sarah on Sun Dec 12, 2010 1:07 pm

odsmk wrote:Your poetry is literally a work of art.

I definitely agree.

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Post by Deth on Sun Dec 12, 2010 3:07 pm


Thanks for the kind words. I definitely intended this to be interpreted differently by anyone who reads it, to let them replace their own memories or ideas and make it enjoyable for anyone. This is a poem I've worked on for over a week. I tried my best to put in as many literary devices as possible- there are similes, metaphors, personifications, alliterations, ironies, oxymorons, metonyms, imagery, foreshadowing, cliffhangers, and defamiliarizations. The most used is symbolism, though, it helps the most with letting the reader inject his/her own meanings into the words.

As for me, I place the story around the late 1700s as you have guessed. I also place the prologue (Winter) and Part I (Summer) in a woods within the Southern Appalachian Mountains. Ibis' aren't found in snowy mountains, so I allow the reader to assume it had been blown off-course and was injured during that travel. I created an untold gap in time between Part I and Part II which moves the story to Southern Florida, after moving to the Ibis' home, along tip of the peninsula in the marshes of the Everglades. The story stays there until Part VIII, when there is flashforward to the future in modern day where the narrator, after having been so long has forgotten many details of the death, invisions a more to-current-day type of passing.

As for reflection of my own past experiences, there is at least one reference per poem. For the most part, it's a historical tale that I'd wrote about a year ago, which I just now turned from a short story to a poem.

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Post by Sarah on Sun Dec 12, 2010 5:22 pm

I think if this were to be put in my American Literature class, we've have to make analyzing this poem into a project or a test grade.

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